June 6, 2019
In Room 1 we are learning to write narratives. We have been working on organising our writing in paragraphs and use a variety of punctuation and language features to make our stories effective. Here are some of our Narratives. Enjoy!
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Hi our darling class, this is Vaa and Emora. We like all the detail from this piece of writing. Our question is, how long did it take to get all the ideas?
ReplyDeleteSincerely,
Vaa and Emora
Kia ora
ReplyDeleteHi Aysha this is Neha from your class.I like your narrative.It is really Interesting how the boy found a dragon egg by his side.Today I have no questions.But I really liked your story.
Thanks Neha I really enjoyed writing it.
DeleteHello Aysha. I love your story it was really interesting to read. Your story made me want to keep reading it and it also made me want to read more of your stories. I enjoyed reading your story. I have no questions and heads up for you. Keep up the good work Aysha!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ema I enjoyed reading your comment.
DeleteTalofa Lava Aysha , I really love your story , it was very interesting to read. I really love the backgrounds and the details it is very creative. Your story was one of the best story's I have ever read. I only have one question how long did it take to do this fantastic story?
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruqayat I toke a while to write this by coming up with the ideas and things so thanks again.
DeleteHi Aysha this is your class mate Soloia . I love your narrative story it was really interesting to read. I also like your details it was amazing. My question, is how did you come up with all the ideas and how long does it take to do your narrative?
ReplyDeleteThanks BFITUF it took a while to write this and I normally get these ideas from movies but change the story.
DeleteHi,its Emma from paroa school.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this story very much.
to improve you could work on explaing what stuff was
like some people might not know what a ps4 or what fortnite is.
keep up the awesome work bye. :)
Hi its Emma from paroa school.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed lost people in the woods,I think it was a good idea putting your planning in the story too.
I am not sure what you need to improve the story was very entertaining
Byeee.
Kia ora Aysha. I really loved how amazing your story was, I thought that it was fantastic. I was wondering what did the boy see?
ReplyDeleteHi Ellakaye. This is Aysha thanks so much for commenting on my story. He saw the baby dragon being carried by a huge man that looked like a hunter. Thanks bye.
DeleteHi aysha this is viena your classmate I really like your work and your work is fantastic I have a question for you where did you get all the information from?
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ReplyDelete✋Hi Aysha your work was amazing π and well written in your sentences π and can you prof read it because there was just a little mistake that didn't π€ make sense and I think that you have improved in your work a lot GREAT WORK ππ 10/10 π
ReplyDeleteHi everyone this is Aysha here I really liked all of your Narratives they were really interesting and fun to read. My question is what will you write next in your narrative? Bye.
ReplyDeletehi its Liam
ReplyDeleteI like the facts but it could be more colourful
thanks bye
Hi Liam, This is Mahara from Edmund Hillary School,I would like to say that you should put the persons name,I mean like you should put the persons name in your comment so they no who your talking about.
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